Virginia Gun Owners Forum - VGOF

I thought I would post it here as well. This is omething that was written for a Author writing a book about " a collection of profiles of people to whom guns are important". He came to TheHighRoad looking for some people to talk about firearms in there lives are such.(Link). Despite bad track record of being anti-gunI decided to indulge his request as it would be hard it change these words around.(I'm sure it possible) So without further to do here is the link to the article. It is to long and hard to read here but if you click the link it will open the document in Google Docs(doesn't matter if you have it or not).


https://docs1.google.com/document/edit?id=1GczcyLstsNfsBkrYcM6e5eZd9EZ9SRr0J2kioUoZwPs&hl=en&pli=1#

BTW If you see any errors or anything let me know. It's late, I could have missed something and I can still edit it.

...and considered them to dangerous to keep. <-- The first "to" should be a "too" The second "to" is perfect.

shooting range and take me and my brother along. <-- For "proper" grammar, should be my brother and I, but few people speak so formally nowadays.

It was just mechanical amazing. Change to either: It was just mechanically amazing. Or to: It was just so mechanically precise that it was almost like clockwork.

Then, just as quickly I a saw how, <-- Typo, remove the a

Things like how to do trigger jobs or guns I don’t even own. <--- Change the or to on maybe?

I write SOPs and documentation for work all the time. Grammar errors tend to stand out to me. Overall, I liked that story. Thank you very much for sharing it!

Thanks man, your a big help. I've always bad at proof reading.

Great story. One thing that will help your writing is to read it aloud in a normal voice. You will be surprised at how much it improves your proofing abilities...

Yeah I did that, it helped a lot. Thanks BTW.

"Neither of them was against the notion as a whole they just weren't into it and considered them too dangerous to keep." Needs a semicolon. Like this: "Neither of them was against the notion; as a whole they just weren't into it and considered them too dangerous to keep.

"and take my brother along ans I along." Should read "and take my brother and me along."

"but didn't bug him to much." Change "to" to "too".

"The fact that were it landed on the paper was totality up to me" should read "The fact that where it landed on the paper was totally up to me".

There are a few other similar issues. Now, that said, I like the spirit of your piece. You're absolutely right in that it'd be very easy for those rights to go away, at least de-facto. You should be politically active, and it's good to see younger folks doing so. I wish more would.

Thanks CowboyT!

Good Job and Good Story....

Couple of things...

"take my brother along and I along" - take out the along after brother

"I often mind myself reading things on gunsmithing" - I'm pretty sure "mind" should be "find"